It's been a month since I had something worth posting here. I'd prefer to post more poetry more often, but I'm not forcing anything.
I came across the Rispetto poetry form at Short Poems by Marinela Reka. This form is Italian in origin, consisting of two quatrains of four lines each. The first stanza rhymes as a-b-a-b, with the second as c-c-d-d.
Here's my first attempt at Rispetto, and my first trip on the Poetry Train.
Anger makes my heart ache
With a fierce desire to redress
The petty choices that some make
To steal joy and stifle progress
Less intent am I to bait and rile
I do not wish to fight or defile
Rather I build positive foundations
Preferring life full of warmth and sun
Copyright 2010
your first rispetto and poetry train. you've got it goin' on. i truly enjoyed this poetic form. i may have to try this one myself. hope all is well. have a great day.
ReplyDeleteVery nice. And a poem with clear meaning. That's uncommon.
ReplyDeleteInteresting poetry form. Nicely done and your meaning is not lost at all
ReplyDeleteNaquilly: I liked this one right away because if forces the poet to be economical.
ReplyDeleteCharles: That's what I was going for.
V: Thanks!
Very nicely done! Great post!
ReplyDelete-Weasel
real nice!
ReplyDeletePamela
*woo woo* said the train whistle.
ReplyDeleteI discovered the form I used (the loop poem) over at Marinela's blog, too. I hadn't encountered the Rispetto before, but now you're making me want to take it for a test drive!
I like these lines especially:
'Less intent am I to bait and rile
I do not wish to fight or defile'
Never change, Travis.
I like your attitude!
ReplyDeleteI love how you've rhymed this. And the perspective is awesome too. :)
ReplyDeletenicely said.
ReplyDeletepowerful piece.
I like your poem. Now you have me thinking, which is the point. :)
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